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Post by - on Jun 12, 2017 17:22:02 GMT -6
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Post by goldendragon on Jun 13, 2017 12:08:04 GMT -6
I finally got around to reading your RP today and here is my feedback. The promo and scene setting in this RP is very good. You do a good job of embodying the character in the promo as far as what we would think a character based off of the Joker would say and do a good job of sitting the scene in the first part of the RP. The scene is not set as strong in the second part though, what kind of room are we, what is going on around you?
As I said you do a good job of promoing as this character, and maybe this has been done before I got here but I would have liked to have seen some character development. What makes Joker, Joker? What makes Joker crazy? What is driving him at the moment, and what is going on in his life at the moment? These are the things that really make the reader connect with the character, I feel anyway lol.
Like I said overall it was a solid promo, just would have liked some CD. I'd actually like to work with you in the future.
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Post by - on Jun 13, 2017 12:26:15 GMT -6
I definitely appreciate the feedback. To save you some time, I first debuted this character as "The Red Killer" Thomas Miller. No face paint or any of that. Almost like Negan from The walking dead. But I wanted him to be the joker, so I made the transformation. What's great about writing is that you get to allow the reader his own imagination to run wild, asking those same questions - where was Joker at, what was happening around him - to a certain I know.
I don't have a lot of matches here, so they should be easy to find. You can read those and see the transformation of Thomas Miller to The Joker.
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