Hey guys, I really put some effort into this promo, and I know I won the match, but I still would like some critique to it. Let me know what I need to work on, and any positive vibes you have about it! Thank you in advance!
Post by goldendragon on Jun 13, 2017 12:08:04 GMT -6
I finally got around to reading your RP today and here is my feedback. The promo and scene setting in this RP is very good. You do a good job of embodying the character in the promo as far as what we would think a character based off of the Joker would say and do a good job of sitting the scene in the first part of the RP. The scene is not set as strong in the second part though, what kind of room are we, what is going on around you?
As I said you do a good job of promoing as this character, and maybe this has been done before I got here but I would have liked to have seen some character development. What makes Joker, Joker? What makes Joker crazy? What is driving him at the moment, and what is going on in his life at the moment? These are the things that really make the reader connect with the character, I feel anyway lol.
Like I said overall it was a solid promo, just would have liked some CD. I'd actually like to work with you in the future.
Record: 9-1-0 Accomplishments: First Ever Legacy Champion
I definitely appreciate the feedback. To save you some time, I first debuted this character as "The Red Killer" Thomas Miller. No face paint or any of that. Almost like Negan from The walking dead. But I wanted him to be the joker, so I made the transformation. What's great about writing is that you get to allow the reader his own imagination to run wild, asking those same questions - where was Joker at, what was happening around him - to a certain I know.
I don't have a lot of matches here, so they should be easy to find. You can read those and see the transformation of Thomas Miller to The Joker.
Henry Saxon: Crap, I may have lost the results. I'm on a device and as I was trying to make sure the coding was correct the device lost internet. I know of a way to recover it from google docs but I can't do that on a device. I may have to go to my job to get
Sept 17, 2018 8:25:56 GMT -6
Henry Saxon: on a PC as that is the only way I can go back in history. Unless soome one knows how to do that on a moblie device.
Sept 17, 2018 8:28:01 GMT -6
Henry Saxon: Got to a PC but I lost the coding and new card so I'm going to recode it and post it. Then sleep, I'll redo the new card when I wake up
Sept 17, 2018 10:15:16 GMT -6
Henry Saxon: I tried adding the roster gfx for the segments and refs of each match but everytime I try I get the Blue Bear so results are posted with it. I'll add it ater when at work along with new card.
Sept 17, 2018 11:12:08 GMT -6
Earl Lockyer: just asking because this is a supershow is there a word limit on rp's
Sept 23, 2018 2:50:49 GMT -6
Henry Saxon: Only one match has a word limit. Courtney Vs Rosanna Latoya Vs Ella Vs Nathalie Vs 3 Mystery. It is at 2,000
Sept 23, 2018 21:24:38 GMT -6
The Aloni Brothers: I didn't realize the deadline was up. -_-
Sept 29, 2018 12:34:03 GMT -6
Henry Saxon: No worries, it happens.
Sept 29, 2018 22:43:34 GMT -6
Henry Saxon: Results still being worked on.
Sept 29, 2018 22:44:21 GMT -6
Henry Saxon: Waiting on a segment, if I don't get it with in the hour I will post the results with out it. Everything else is done and coded.
Sept 30, 2018 15:25:19 GMT -6
Henry Saxon: Card is posted. One or two more matches will be added later as well as GFX
Oct 2, 2018 11:46:28 GMT -6
Henry Saxon: Last match has been added to the card.
Oct 2, 2018 23:20:13 GMT -6
Henry Saxon: Promo threads will be posted in a few hours
Oct 4, 2018 17:50:40 GMT -6
Henry Saxon: Working on the last two matches then have to code the whole show and it will be psoted
Oct 14, 2018 10:25:50 GMT -6
Henry Saxon: Guys results are done but Google Docs wont let me remove it over to this site
Oct 14, 2018 16:25:42 GMT -6
Earl Lockyer: so are bio's going to be moved over to the new sight
Oct 14, 2018 19:09:30 GMT -6
Henry Saxon: Yes, everyone will need to move there bios over
Oct 15, 2018 4:41:19 GMT -6
Tad Ezra: Apologies to all, and to John Blade especially. Somehow I was unable to post the results with his segment, but it has been added to the show, so hopefully all will read it. My apologies again.
Oct 15, 2018 23:48:46 GMT -6
Henry Saxon: In the next 24 hours I will be moving NLW Bios over to SCW that agreed to come over. You have to at least make an account there ASAP please
Oct 21, 2018 17:02:31 GMT -6