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Post by Zack Goldman on Jul 21, 2016 0:04:17 GMT -6
Give it to us, the good the bad and the ugly.
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Post by Samantha Tolson on Jul 21, 2016 0:15:35 GMT -6
The Good:
Top-notch graphics for the matches and such. Lots of segments to help break up the in-ring action, but not so many that it became like an Attitude Era broadcast. Matches, though fairly summarized, hit the points they needed to hit.
The Bad:
The matches were short. This, however, given the sheer size of this first card, is forgivable of course. The two no-shows did hurt, but sometimes real life takes over.
The Ugly:
Typos, typos, typos. Lots of little typos and grammatical issues that will need to get cleaned up moving forward. Little details like this, as I've found over my time in this game, can keep a fed from being good to being great, and as picky as it is, those on the outside looking in, wanting to join, will notice.
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Post by Jackson Stewart on Jul 21, 2016 0:42:17 GMT -6
The Good The amount of people who actually showed up with rps after this place opened. That shows passion. Now we must keep that level of commitment.
The Bad A few matches felt a little off timing wise. I don't know if that was because the size of the card or because of the time constraints on writing the matches themselves. They were well written but still felt a little off. Something we can fix for the shows to come.
The ugly I got to say the no shows. I get it that lif deals some shitty hands and we has adults have to take responsibility for our lives. Obviously I am going to exclude the two who told Zack ahead of time but the others who no showed. Has no excuse. They knew when the card was announced and didn't bother putting anything up.
The top 5 rpers of the week in my opinion in no particular order
1. Serenity Wilson 2. Alex Jones 3. Dexter Anthony 4. Alyce Kessler 5. Mark Storm
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Post by Finn Whelan on Jul 21, 2016 8:04:25 GMT -6
The Good: 1. For a very first show, the sheer amount of numbers for roleplays being submitted was PHENOMENAL. Four people didn't show up, but really, it was only two because they'd told the owner. For a card the size it was, that was awesome. (Clap, clap, clapclapclap). 2. I felt like the show flowed for the most part, and everything fit into the right places. 3. I really liked the actions between the characters during segments. It seemed to fit. 4. A few of the matches were written amazingly. Good job!
The Bad: 1. Holy Jesus, the amount of incorrect grammar made it really hard to read. Proofing your work before you submit is essential. Throw it into Microsoft Word or a grammar checking website before you submit or place it into the show (or like has been done in other feds I've been in, the show was posted and someone came behind and fixed all the grammar). Like Sam's handler said, it's really nitpicky, but if you expect US to correct grammar and spelling in our roleplays, then it is fine for us to expect the show to reflect the same. 2. Things need to be spaced out in some matches. I didn't see a lot of matches this way, so this is good, but it still existed. A wall of words with a bunch of actions could probably be better spaced with perhaps the commentators saying something, or simply just breaking it up into several paragraphs. 3. The match lengths could have been longer. Again, to re-quote, "this is forgivable" for the sheer size of the card, so I'm better they will move forward with more interest.
The Ugly: 1. I already mentioned this to Kaden/Zack/I-don't-know-your-actual-name, but one of the worst things I saw over the night is a lot of matches where characters would do something that doesn't fit their crowd alignment, or whatever. Cheating, but they may be a face character? That doesn't make sense. 2. Four matches had chair shots.
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Post by Zack Goldman on Jul 21, 2016 8:48:24 GMT -6
Mike is the real name. I had spell check on as I was checking the matches that were wrote and nothing came up and when it did I looked. Will have to look closer at it.
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Post by Dick Devereaux on Jul 21, 2016 10:14:09 GMT -6
The Good - Kickass roleplays. For the most part everyone did an awesome ass job with that! - Matches were awesome and the graphics for the matches were amazing. Just adds a little more flair which I absolutely love. - Segments blended well with everything linking the whole show together in a good fashion. Love it.
The Bad - Grammer. Everyone else has said it so I don't need to get into it. Really something simple to fix up so no biggie. - Spacing. It was very blocky in some matches. Easy fix? Commentaters need to say more. It'll break up the matches more and create length.
The Ugly - No Shows. People need to keep in contact with you when they aren't gonna' roleplay. Simple as that. Not your fault at all as an owner.
Take it as creative critique. Just trying to help you improve the product. The show was awesome and if you just fix a few details, it will be phenomenal!
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Post by Zack Goldman on Jul 21, 2016 11:52:21 GMT -6
Yeah Sometimes I feel I add too much commentary but we can def add more and push the story in general.
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Post by Tiffany Prada on Jul 21, 2016 12:07:29 GMT -6
The Good: Nice put for first show The Bad: No shows The Ugly: I'm not picky on typos and all that because we all can make mistakes and sometimes its hard to catch them all. Overall: Great show
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