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Post by goldendragon on May 22, 2017 12:06:26 GMT -6
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Post by - on Jun 2, 2017 17:43:14 GMT -6
Hey Eric - sorry it has taken me a bit to give you a review.
I really enjoyed the conversations between Shinjiro and his family. Just by reading the first off-camera part, I can tell you are experienced in writing promos. The smooth transitions between each person was great, and kept me interested for sure.
So far, the only criticism I do have to give is before posting the promo, please re-read it and correct grammar and spelling errors, as there were some just in the first off-camera sequence.
It is refreshing sometimes to read a promo that isn't very long, but yet is detailed, and paints the picture it wants you to see. You did very well with describing the place you were at, little mundane things here and there, but not going overboard. You definitely kept my attention throughout the entire promo. Like I said before, grammar and spelling mistakes were the things you need to work on, and I cannot wait to see your upcoming promos.
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